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 In the next couple of years ago middle school language teacher, to my review of the standard composition, Yu's essay failed.
Yu Wen is recorded as follows:
Chinese land, many views, there are several very small, deeply embedded historical the scenery amazing. one of the foot in Nanjing Zhongshan. here Yamao Water Pik, monuments stretching, and wandering around the meantime, step by step all the Six Dynasties Xunfeng, Southern Tang Rhyme; faintly visible large Ming Wang Qi, great presence. Whenever clear autumn season, the numerous joys and sorrows attributed to Maple Leaf, watching the story in the Solemn condensate. Sam Rainsy sun and moon, forest birds, described as the highest poetic Chinese culture also.
Zhongshan scenery was beautiful, but unfortunately will be the occasion dragon, wind and rain greenish yellow, experienced catastrophe, becoming decadent Wu. Fortunately, every Golden Age was re-packed country, the year of Nanjing people start improvement in Year of Monkey grand, spend five billion, moved thirteen villages, migration of two million, seven acres of green growth, New Plank Road, call set species, stocked with many parks, rehabilitation of the two tombs, and sometimes spectacular, such as the picture of the new exhibition, Ridge Court first wash, classic reproduction. Jinling city, can pitch the years since then, greeted the distance; Chinese civilization, from This increase in the Valley of a gas gathering, reading of the door. Yuzuo Wen ordered those in charge, square off a few words, has been hazy and Full, relaxed and happy.
first batch:
There are several very small, deeply embedded history and scenery amazing. one of the foot of Zhongshan in Nanjing The scenery amazing. For this to belittle Chinese scenery, what it is not always respected the Chinese culture should be said Yu. The problem lies in where? out in grammar. This sentence is a sentence turning, turning around the two sub-periods, before and after contrast, subversion of the preceding sentence after the sentence, after the former virtual reality, focusing on post-sentence. said sentence, but the meaning of each other before and after the sentence, does not subvert the preceding sentence after the sentence. For example, you can change the meaning of this: progressive sentence to two sentences, before and after each other.
next, ; very loud, the other, saying it? to Where is it? also lies in the grammar, amazing. one of the foot of Zhongshan in Nanjing a breakthrough in a natural.

is the subject, start relaxed and happy sentence is how the case? In my opinion, Yu was meant to say, Zhongshan scenery so beautiful, I get the impression that too, and I wrote a few words, all the scenery of Zhongshan emerge as if in my eyes. He meant to say this, but do not know, In addition to many other text syntax errors in the grammar of the largest bear is that you do not do not white, neither fish nor fowl. modern people to write classical, do not obscure words, you can pop out loud, but must follow the basic norms of classical. classical sentence simple, mostly elliptical sentence, guests will not be like that complement the main taste, like should be omitted, not to mention The ambitious renovation launched Rhyme of Tang and content.
According Garden Authority said, first conception. purposive level, directly determine the quality of writing. Yu Wen at the beginning of the first big fool said, Zhongshan is the beauty of the few Chinese The is a platter: yet. to? ancient capital of ten dynasties, Sun Yat-sen, is the general secondary school students also can be extracted from this theme: here the replacement of generations rise and fall of dynasties, Sun Yat-sen overthrew the monarchy, and here became provisional president, was buried here after the death of Chung Hill had the honor to witness the rolling tide of the Chinese history. Of course, you can say, In short, you have to have themes. In addition, the ; the highest poetic Chinese culture, report. you're not accounting, you remember why these accounts? behind the do not fly, and as the ancient capital of ten dynasties, only to pitch through the years repair a garden, reading culture?
composition of the basic requirements for smooth flow statement, the theme clearly highlighted. to the standard view, Yu's essay failed .